Friday, 1 February 2013

Fragile


Tiny birdlings
Chirping, hopping around
Heavenly sound
Heavenly sound
Mom’s caress, her loving feed
All they need
All they need
Dad around, his assuring pat
To fool the cat
To fool the cat
Learn tricks, spread wings wide
Parents’ pride
Parents’ pride
Wise kids, ready for worldly test
Empty nest
Empty nest
Receives a gift, the best pick
Walking stick
Walking stick
Watery, wrinkled smile
Pride fragile

For:  Carpe Diem and Haiku Heights
Picture taken from: Google search


76 comments:

  1. Wow wow wow .... this is a wonderful cascading haiku ... each stanza stands of its own, and together they form a great story ... a perfect family tale !!!

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    1. Thanks Amrit, You are just too generous!

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  2. Hi Meenakshi, You have some magic with the words!! Such simple words with so much depth.. Loved it. Keep writing.

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    1. Thanks Ma'am for your amazing words, There couldn't be a better start to this morning!

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  3. Beautiful Haiku and very nicely written. :)

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  4. There you go.. just seven haikus and a lifetime has been explained with beauty and elan.. Good one yet again..

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    1. Thank you Deepak, I hope I never disappoint you.

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  5. It's interesting how you play with words,as haiku each stanza is great and being a complete poem it's superb writing. Thank you for sharing.

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    1. Thanks Cifar,

      Haiku it self is a limited version of poem but with in that there are so many possibilities to explore, I am now a fan of this form.

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  6. Really nice to read and feel. Very nicely put up... :)

    http://journeyintrance.blogspot.in/2013/02/date-with-dolphins.html

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    1. Thanks Radhika, and your date with dolphins is amazing. I wish mine is set up soon.

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  7. This is a brilliant chain of haiku... Love it. :-)

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  8. Congrats. You win a Liebster award. For details ..visit

    http://koncern.blogspot.in/

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    1. Thanks a trillion, Ashish! That's so sweet of you. I have read your post and soon would post a reply.

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  9. Wow! This is an extremely beautiful piece.
    Excellent job! :)

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    1. I am happy you liked it, Thank you so much!

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  10. How beautifully you've portrayed the journey of life. Your words flow like water, seamlessly transcending ages and phases. You've touched a chord in my heart yet again :)

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    1. Thanks Meenakshi, This chain was kind of lyrical experiment. I am happy it came out well and you liked it.

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  11. Very beautiful.. I recall when I had written first chain of haiku a couple of years ago..many people had expressed surprise and had liked too.. and today to see this here..well, one feels quite happy to find the style spreading..this is awesome and very sentimental cascade..

    RS:)

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    1. Thanks Ramesh Sir for showing us that haiku could be like pearls strung together in a common thread.

      I am glad you liked my effort.

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  12. Wonderful cascading haiku tells the story of a lifetime, very well done. Thank you for sahring your thoughts on Staff/Walking Stick.

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  13. Wonderful layering of scenarios! A new layer on older foundations! Enchanting!

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  14. Ahw!! wonderful flow Meenakshi...Loved the way you linked like chain...

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    1. Thank yo so much, Valli, it means a lot!

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  15. Great cascades, Meenakshi! Yes, with Dad around it's always reassuring! Nicely!

    Hank

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    1. For a child, both parents are important, both have their own role to play. Thanks Kaykuala.

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  16. I just have to echo what everyone else said.
    These are wonderful, individually and collectively.
    Beautiful story.

    Cheers!
    JzB

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  17. Often times, the simplest and most concrete images are the best for haiku, which is true in case of this particular bunch :)) Loved this...

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    1. Thanks Mam, You kind of validated my effort. Thanks a lot!

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  18. This is beautiful and so touching...

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  19. the circle of life is beautifully captured in your Haiku Meenakshi:) "pride fragile" indeed!!

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    1. Thanks Reshma, Pride is anyway a very brittle thing.

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    1. Yes it is. but looking at the past seems so short.

      Thanks for visit!

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  21. I love the narrative use of haiku. The chain of haiku nicely transmits the chain of events. Beautiful.

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    1. Thanks Alice, that a really encouraging.

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  22. Beautiful words to depict the journey of life!

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  23. Superb-this cascade is like a string of pearls(borrowing your words).

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    1. I am happy it touched a chord, thank you so much!

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  24. wow, what an amazing haiku cascade, well done

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  25. Wonderful flow of words . Salaam.

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  26. very very beautiful and...fragile!!

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  27. Wonderful imagery, Meenakshi

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  29. each is a gem in itself... beautiful effect... like waterfall.

    http://unshakenthoughts.com/2013/02/03/i-will-never-let-it-die/

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  30. Perfect tumble of haiku. Just beautiful.

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  31. you have wonderful blessing of expressing your thoughts so beautifully.....I am just amazed....wow !

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