Tuesday, 8 January 2013

गीला गीला सूरज



सूरज गीला गीला सा...

कोहरे की गीली चादर ओढ़े, 

चुप चाप बिना कोई छाप  छोड़े 

इस पार से उस पार में,

चाय का प्याला लिए इंतज़ार में,

 मैं, पंछी, गिलहरी, और  मेरा बरामदा 

सब जोहें तुम्हारी बाट , पूछें तुम्हारा  पता 


दिन सीला सीला सा...

लाओ तुम्हारी गीली चादर तार पे सुखा दूँ, 

झाड़ के, लपेट के, संदूक में छिपा दूँ ,

सुखी लकड़ियाँ का अलाव जलायें  चलो,

कुछ चिंगारियाँ उधार मांग लायें चलो,

 कि तुम्हें कुछ सुकून आये 

और मेरे बरामदे में फिर धूप आये 


 Picture taken from: aultparksunrise.com

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27 comments:

  1. Sreeja8 January 2013 at 06:48

    I loved the first stanza...
    Beautiful...

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  2. Amrit Sinha8 January 2013 at 07:10

    Your hindi poems are very peaceful :-)

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    1. Woman'n'Beyond8 January 2013 at 08:15

      I am glad if it could infuse that feeling!

      Thanks a lot!

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  3. Reshma8 January 2013 at 07:41

    The lines recreate the wintry feeling, the start is simply brilliant "सूरज गीला गीला सा..."

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    1. Woman'n'Beyond8 January 2013 at 08:17

      Thanks Reshma,

      Really I implore sun to come out and spread its sunshine!

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  4. Woman'n'Beyond8 January 2013 at 18:54

    Thank you, Sir!

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  5. Panchali8 January 2013 at 20:52

    geela-geela sa suraj aur dil--- WOW!!!mera bhiga-bhiga sa man khil utha is kavita ko parkar! Ati sundar:)

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    1. Woman'n'Beyond9 January 2013 at 01:33

      I am glad if it could reach your heart and make you smile:)

      Absolutely a pleasure!

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  6. Madan Mohan Saxena8 January 2013 at 22:24

    मधुर भाव लिये भावुक करती रचना,बहुत अद्भुत अहसास...सुन्दर प्रस्तुति

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  7. AmitAag8 January 2013 at 22:41

    "कुछ चिंगारियाँ उधार मांग लायें चलो,

    कि तुम्हें कुछ सुकून आये

    और मेरे बरामदे में फिर धूप आये ..."
    Absolutely heart touching and very beautiful!!

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    1. Woman'n'Beyond9 January 2013 at 01:34

      The words of praise from you are always uplifting, Thank you, Sir!

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  8. Deepak Kripal8 January 2013 at 23:48

    सुखी लकड़ियाँ का अलाव जलायें चलो,

    कुछ चिंगारियाँ उधार मांग लायें चलो,

    कि तुम्हें कुछ सुकून आये

    और मेरे बरामदे में फिर धूप आये..


    Amit ji is spot on.. That's where you took us in and mesmerized us with your magic.. Superb write up Meenakshi... what i like the most about your writing is your versatility and the ease with which you write on different subjects, genre and language.. keep'em coming.. i am all game for it..

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    1. Woman'n'Beyond9 January 2013 at 01:38

      Thanks Deepak, you made my day!

      My writings are ordinary, but praise coming from poets like you makes them special.

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  9. anamica mehra9 January 2013 at 02:36

    I love the lines सुखी लकड़ियाँ का अलाव जलायें चलो,


    कुछ चिंगारियाँ उधार मांग लायें चलो,


    कि तुम्हें कुछ सुकून आये


    और मेरे बरामदे में फिर धूप आये

    kya baat hai

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  10. Bikram9 January 2013 at 02:42

    oh yes .. fir se dhoop aye ..
    but this gila gila mausam is also good.. I remember in chandigarh whenever it was like this .. we friends would get together and off to Uphill Kasauli via the back route ...

    IT use to be beautifullllllllllllll :)

    memories came back Meenakhshi reading this .. AWESOMEEEEEEEEE

    Bikram's

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    1. Woman'n'Beyond9 January 2013 at 08:17

      yeah, I enjoy it in the beginning, but then it kind of gets too much!!

      I am glad you enjoyed it!!

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  11. ekta khetan9 January 2013 at 04:27

    Brilliant...mere mann ki baat chinn li...mere baramade mein bhi dhoop nahi aati
    sardiya bada satati
    jab tum bulao suraj ki uss sunehri kiran ko,
    toh mera pata bhi zaroor batana...
    kehna usse ki mere angana bhi zaroor muskurana!

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    1. Woman'n'Beyond9 January 2013 at 08:19

      Thaaannnnnnnnkkkkkkkk YYYYYYYoooooooouuuuuuuuu!

      It is such a sweat gesture!

      I already sent it. ky aapke baramde mein aaj dhoop aayi??

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  12. Rajni Sinha10 January 2013 at 19:36

    absolutely beautiful

    but loved the following lines most


    कुछ चिंगारियाँ उधार मांग लायें चलो,

    कि तुम्हें कुछ सुकून आये

    और मेरे बरामदे में फिर धूप आये

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  13. Bhavana11 January 2013 at 08:08

    You write hindi poetry? I do not have the felicity in verse...but something feels sweet here--the way you socialize the grey sun and the way you social and personal awakening needs with emerging sun...

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    1. Woman'n'Beyond12 January 2013 at 03:48

      You nailed it Bhavana, Last few days were so depressing and saddening and the lack of sun only aggravates the sense of darkening!

      Thanks for reading!

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  14. indu chhibber17 January 2013 at 04:03

    All your poems are incomparable i need to come here with more time on my hands.

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