This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 35; the thirty-fifth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The theme for the month is "...and the world was silent again"
Winters…
rigid, relentless, rebellious
shivering bodies, bare souls
stunned into inertia
a scream broke the mirage of silence…
Winters…
pierced though pores, bit into bones
numbing snow, feet dug into soft
trap
frost bitten toes ached, deserted legs,
couldn't move to help,
...blood
curdling screams.
eyes laden with frost, shut,
oblivious to
desertion, decay
...invisible screams.
ears froze, wrapped under layers,
seeking
warm reclusion
heard no more… no words, no help calls,
...not
even screams.
sounds dropped one by one…and the world
became silent…again.
all senses in quarantine, heart left to
nurse its own pain,
heart…where the winter set in
turning rivulets coursing through veins…white
screams couldn't broke in
everything still, devoid of life but claws…
moved nimbly to satiate hunger,
beastly, dispassionate, unkind
hunger…insatiable, deaf, blind
using everything weaker, meeker to fuel its
fire
...silenced screams.
earthly winters will end soon…
but no respite,
in sight,
from the iceage that has set in
...on mankind.
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And you silenced the world again with your marvelous writing :-)
ReplyDelete:P I don't know if it is worth this praise, thank you so much, your words really mean lot!
ReplyDeletevery well written...iceage that has set on man..yes truly, how else will one explain his cold beastly attitude?
ReplyDeletethanks a lot for reading through my poem!
ReplyDeleteAwesome writing Meenakshi!
ReplyDeleteI glad you liked it, Valli!
Deleteसुन्दर कविता मीनाक्षी जी
ReplyDeleteठंड की ठिठुरन से
खुदा आपको बचाए रजाईयो की गलन से
बदली छटे
धूप पड़े
सूरज आए
जिंदगी बसंत हो जाए
Amen! I wish the same for you!!
DeleteThanks for this lovely comment!
Beautiful..It was cold and very cold the way you portrayed. Like freezing one's blood. Brave writing Meenakshi! #respect
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Ekta! We have a saying in our language, khoon safed ho jana. I wonder if our blood has really turned white!
ReplyDeleteWhite is still associated with purity, our blood has become black.
DeleteI loved ur post and my vote goes for you!
http://ektakhetan.blogspot.in/
You always make me feel a winner even before the contest is over.
DeleteI owe yo a big thanks and a bear hug for this sweet gesture!
Intense...profound...wonderful!!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sir!
DeleteRemarkable poem...agree with your...last line...this winter may go in few months....but the winter that has been instilled within us...God only knows how long will it take to remove the winter from our hearts...!!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Anjan, I hope it ends soon!!
DeleteI wish and hope everyone reads this and then comes out and makes a NOISE ..It because it takes a loud voice to make the deaf hear
ReplyDeleteas our martyrs said
“I Dont want your tears , I don’t want your pity, I want your ANGER about this system, Given your anger CHANGE WILL COME, Unless there is anger how can everything change ” ?
Bikram's
A loud noise, generally is prohibited in snow for the fear of avalanche! I wish we yell, shout, scream aloud and bring on the avalanche.
DeleteThanks for well thought comments, Bikram. You always add value to my write-ups.
nice blog n nice poem, thaks
ReplyDeleteThanks, Gaj!
Deleteloved the metaphor. Bring on the avalanche indeed!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Reshma, A kind appreciation makes the effort worthwhile!
DeleteWoah! Very nice. All through, you kept me on the verge of understanding the poem.. until the end part started coming. Till then, I was kind of guessing what follows next. Very beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteIt's a very hard post. I dont know what that means.. but that's what comes to my mind at the moment.
I agree when you say hard! But the comparison was inevitable!
DeleteThanks for your generous words!
Great!! Loved it...
ReplyDeleteThanks Sreeja!
DeleteSo much of rage, despair....
ReplyDeletePowerful!
Severe winters coupled with prevailing conditions pushed me to write this. The comparison sprang up automatically!
DeleteThanks for reading!!
truly profound :) and quite timely . . all the best for BAT :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Maliny!
ReplyDeleteits truly a hard hitting poem and of course the need of an hour....I hope this rage and anger is voiced out high,high so high and continues till we see a remarkable ,required change.
ReplyDeleteAll the Best
I do hope so. Thanks for visiting!
DeleteVery well written, Meenakshi. What has unfolded line after line is poignant! ATB for BAT!Kudos..girl!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Mam! You words are music to my heart.
DeleteMost poems hit my head and bounce straight back. At times though, some seep in and make a nest in my psyche.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this one. It will remain with me for a long time.
Thanks for such a lovely compliment, even these kind words will stay with me forever.
DeleteThanks from the bottom of my heart!
Ouch--that is brutal.
ReplyDelete"but no respite,
in sight,
from the iceage that has set in
...on mankind."
Now as I connect this piece with the Hindi poem I just read, I feel the last two stanzas of that poem--I want sun back on my verandah...
You can read my mind! Thanks for visiting, much appreciated!
DeleteThis is a hard one, a strong one! Hope the chillness in our people gets out of us before another such rage happens!
ReplyDeleteThanks Hari, Let's pray together that spring summer melts the cold within our hearts too.
DeleteWhoa! Truly you silenced the world again with your powerful words. I can feel the harsh coldness inside me, while reading your lines. I think this chillness will remain in my heart for sometime. soon i wish the winter prevails in us disappear with a ray of hope and the courage. A Very Beautiful Writing.. Kudos!!
ReplyDeleteA Rat's Nibble
Thank you so much for making a room for reading this one among host of entries.
DeleteI am happy you liked it!
This,my friend, is too beautiful! I wish I could write like you people. Beautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteThat's a wonderful compliment. Thank you so much!
Deleteas cold as the winter itself! wonderful...superb lines, esp the closing ones marked the spirit of the poem!
ReplyDeleteAkila
Thanks Akila, welcome to my space!
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